i like this metaphor.. very unique at well thought out

now it makes sense. cool poem by the way. great job!

AH! i adore it! excellent/outstanding/amazing/oober fantastic/fantasmic(sorry it's a marching band word...)

FAVORITES!

-sunshine

this takes thought, the concept, the writing it, the reading it. but it's really well written and i like that. i had 'just the two of us' stuck in my head all thru the beginning cos the first line lol... nicely done, tho.

I loved the 'short hand' and 'longhand' theory, this was such a beautiful way of describing such a poignant romance. Keep writing