Oo, gotta love the imagery. The longing is seeping through each line of the second half of the poem. I love it.

Much love,

Lady Glass

This is so sweet! I LOVE how you showed th concept of passing time, every little detail adding to the suspense. It almost makes the reader feel anxious. And then the end...aw. It made me go all girly, which doesn't happen often. Nicely done.

i wonder.are guys like you for real?as always, an articulate poem.

-sV

i like the wording on this one better, it seems more real.

and you are right my punctuation lacks horribly, i'm working on it! thanks

Each line connects perfectly and the descriptions are beautiful, and the emotions real as if describing a fairy tale.

i like all of the adj. and details you use in the begining of this poem. and i like how you make time such a burden.

I really liked the first half of the poem, where you described how time passed and all. Brilliant writing. =)

This is a beautiful piece, well laid out, lovely flow and amazing imagery, you actually feel as though you can feel what the person does, really great write.