I like the message here, as With Rhyme and Reasn stated in her review: 'we need to stop playing God.' Not that I agree, but this was a fantastic way of putting it. I got lots of vivid images from this too, which is always a bonus. Actually, the first time I read this I thought of Tim Burton. Not sure why.

Daze

Creepy, beautiful, crazy, etc. What more could a poem need? Great rhymes here. None of that weird, pseudo-Shakespearean slant stuff. It kind of reminds me of the common "we need to stop playing God and start accepting the fact that we're human"-the "pinnacle of our perfection". Also, the mention of these "zenith babies" being "mutants"-wonderful. This reminds me of Adam's fall: we're all mutants of God's intended perfection. But I'm going all religious on you. Copious apologies. Nice job.

J

irony is always better with the hint of a smile. i love this.

I like it... very ironic and simple and effective. I like the language.

I really like this. The images you conjure in this piece are interesting and vivid. I also admire the pithiness of the poem – you didn’t have to say a lot to get your point across. And the rhyming is a flourish that really adds flair to the poem. Keep up the good work!