great story! It's beautifully written! I still can't figure out whether Dylan will end up with Valerie or Kirsten...I keep going back and forth.

Natasha was annoying even ME. When she started with the Val-Val thing, I felt like killing her (if you could harm a fictional character, I would).

What's up with Kirsten's moods? One minute she's (semi) friendly and the other minute shes the biggest ** there.

I love the name Lyxa. It's strange and different, definently something I haven't heard before.

Well, except for one, of course, he thought wistfully. A sentence from a song drifted into his mind:

“You always want what you can’t have…” How true.

what song did you mean here?

Anyways, update soon!

cool plot but it feels unrealistic like the setting is classicaly sterotypical with the hot jock thing and the cheerleader childhood friends and best friend - u have all the cliches in one so its really predictable and ur characters seem really shallow, so it comes off as unrealistic it would be good to see different sides of ur characters to give them more depth. otherwise it has enormous potential and lots of good humour. thanks.

update soon!

love it, love it, love it. im really ** at kris though shes soo damn naive.

khai!! u removed some parts??
no wonder i cannot understand bout the reviews they gave.
can email me the editted part.
aww. poor dylan.
that's the ending?

Hey hey there...you may think i stopped reading, but nah i didn't (Well it's only today on the 15 January that i realise you had a new chapter lol...sorry that it took so long...since3 months ago lol..)

Well anyway Chapter 5 I can see is another development chapter, but it's still great. Don't forget that I too am writing a story of my own and actually I've already completed 7 chapters (Yeah it's called Little Fighter 2 - The Next Generation). Guess it's time i ought to post them on fictionpress. I should probably post them now he...after i register..

Well since it has been a long while since I've read your story, I have to probably read from chapter 1 again to recap your story lol...but i can see much of this chapter is on the development of Valerie, so it's cool.

Well, time to upload. Catch ya later.

UPDATE: So just realise you have to wait for 3 days before I'm able to upload...oh well...I'll give you my webbie when it's ready eh..My story won't be as good as yours (due to lacking in vocabulary), but I'll try to improve on the vocabulary in future chapters. Okay cya ^_^

Well, here I am, giving you my long overdue review when I really should be studying Commerce. SIGH. Your exams are over, you lucky **.

Anyway, this chapter is as great as usual, except...I don't know...I want to see more Kirsten. Marissa is HILARIOUS. I don't know why, but I've always thought of Marissa as the name of a blond, blue-eyed, preppy girl, and this one exceeds expectations. I can't wait for the next chapter...I love cheerleading showdowns!

As for Dylan, maybe he should start being an active hero and taking control of situations for a change. I don't know why, but he annoyed me in this chapter. I liked Natasha. And how do you know so much about cheerleading moves, anyhow?!

Haha, I loved Valerie's 'diary entry'. It was funny.

On to the next. Karin, I'm begging you now. PLEASE UPDATE SOON AND STOP PROCRASTINATING SO MUCH!

That's true; you did warn me not to take anything for granted.

And no, you never said Valerie would end up with Dylan. I can't necessarily say that you implied it either. It's more just what I want to happen ;). I think they go well together, having known each other since childhood 'n' all (especially having liked each other way back when they were ten, or some age around then).

"...Natasha merely rolled her large, expressive eyes." No offense or anything, but I personally feel the "large, expressive eyes" line is just very cliche--in a bad way. I'm not yeling at you, just informing you because I know you're talented and can find some way around that.

"Kirsten turned her head to look at the girl, and was greeted by a flash of green eyes and that unmistakable flowing red mane." I can only presume you're describing Valerie. I have no problems with this except: I thought Valerie had blue eyes. Did I just read wrong or did you make a mistake (don't be ashamed to admit it, I make mistakes in my stories all the time), or what?

Anyway. That's really all the critique I have to offer, and even so it's not really critique. You're simply amazing that way =)

I want to harm Natasha, and Desiree really piques my interest. I hope you plan on making her an important character in the story because she seems really interesting and I'd like to find out more about her. Yup.

Poor Dylan is all I can say =(. Do he and Marissa have a history together (not necessarily a boyfriend-girlfriend type history)? She is another character I'm marking down under my "People to Attack with Painful Objects."

Um. I think I was going to say something else. Well, besides that this chapter was incredible (unsurprisingly), I think I've run out of random things to ramble about. (You're not the only one capable of rambling. I'm like the freaking energizer bunny of rambling.)

I hope you update soon... and not in seven kajillion years (though, sadly, I have a bad feeling that may happen).

PS. Were you by any chance referring to the Teddy Geiger song "For You I Will" when Dylan thinks of the lyrics "You always want what you can't have"? Becuase later he also thought "For you, I will," which is also in the song. 'N' yeah. That's all. =) Sorry that it's mega-long.

HEYY.

Haha, nice story! Lyxa is so evil, gosh. I would hate to find out what happened next.

..Though at the same time i want to.

But you know what i mean.

I actually like Kirsten, but when she's a normal person around Dylan. I hate when she's all "popular" though. Hahaha.

Randal's an **!

Haha very soon ;] Hm.. do I sense a love triangle coming up? Well.. I'm on Kristen's side :D :D

ahh so interesting! :D :D I hope you update soon! :D

I love this story- so much drama! And I love drama!

Gr. *glares* You deliberately misled me, you little chit! (What does chit mean, anyway?)Anyway, HAPPY BIRTHDAY! Belated, I know, but still. You're sixteen now. Pshaw. Two years older than me. I hate you!Okay, about the chapter now...I loved it. Very drama filled! I was peeing in my pants for Valerie when Kirs and Dyl were about to kiss...DAMMIT, WHY DIDN'T THEY?! I want Kirs to stop being so annoying with Randall and mope after someone for a change. Poor Dyl...he was so love struck. And not much of Val, really, this chapter, but that was to be expected.I WANT TO SEE THE CHEERLEADING TRYOUTS! LIKE, NOW! And shut up about the intimidating skills already...you're the one that intimidates me. You know what happens when I try to write in third person? I sound like a cow. You, on the other hand, just...flow.Haha about Natasha and Desiree. Interesting introduction of new characters. I'm guessing we will see a lot more of them?UPDATE! NO MORE PROCRASTINATION! Too bad I'm not still in M'sia so I could fly through your window and FORCE you to write.

I love Dylan! Okay haha that was weird :D it's just kind of weird cuz the main character in my story's named Dylan as well... I think I mentioned that before. Whatever! LOVED this chapter!

I guess all I have left to say is: UPDATE SOON...

Why hello :) I got annoyed at my homework and decided to ditch so I could read your story ;) Even though there's only four chapters, I can see great potential :) I'm liking how the plots working out, and though it's slightly twisted now, I'm sure you'll clear everything up for us as the story progresses. Can't wait ;) *rubs hands together anticipatedly* Haha. But I gots questions! Or rather, I have one question ;) Is Dylan supposed to end up with Valerie...or Kirsten? I don't particularly dislike Kirsten, but then again, I don't like her that much either ;) I suppose it's beacuse I'm more inclined towards Valerie, but hey, who isn't? Haha. I'm not biased :O No, no, no, definitely not. Ah well, I will be waiting here obediently for another update that will hopefully come soon. *prays day and night* Ciao for now! And do not forget to update :O

btw, i think ur new summary makes no sense for your story because it's about dylan really...not valerie...ya know? maybe it should be...um..."Dylan Hunt, King Jock of Leondale High, is in love with Queen Bee Kirsten and her best friend but she has a player boyfriend. So what happens when an old friend who the player bf was with shows up? Lots of drama." idk just thinking. but i so love the story. and if u look at my chapter 4 review, i just figured out that's it's valerie...