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Warg
2006-08-09
ch 1,

Good work here.

Though i must admit, this loses me near the end, and i am left making half-guesses, wondering.

Hmm.. All the same, lovely effort :)

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p.s: some very beutiful lines i'd quote.. that work so well for me, with me.. *that springing back up so quickly and permanently after being stepped on* and the bracket following.. Awesome

Femme de Dieu
2006-06-06
ch 1,

I'm surprised at times the good poems on this f/p in general that go unreviewed.

(In fact, I make it a practice to always read the UNreviewed poems on anyone's site first...)

I couldn't let that happen to this one. Very good theme going here. Carried out throughout, which always makes a piece more enjoyable. I hate when the thread is lost in a poem or even in fiction.

Here are my favorite lines:

"that springing back up so quickly and permanently after being stepped on(even if it was your own shoe)has never been a very human thing to do."

Very original image there of being stepped on by our own shoe. Oh, how often we do that! And the follow-up line to me would have almost worked with the word "humane" as well, if not better. In some sense, I think it IS a very "human" thing to do. We do it all the time. Another version of "put our foot in our mouths." Constantly saying things or doing things that end up hurting our own selves.

However, it is not a very "humane" thing to do-- even when it is to ourselves. And we sometimes forget that factor-- thinking it is all right as long as we are the only ones getting hurt.

Well, I'm rambling, I must stop.But I did very much enjoy the whole concept of "cleansing."

Look forward to reading more... =)

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