I have to say, it was good. A bit confusing at times, but a homerun none the less. Really makes you wonder though...

hey! another cool poem! ignorance truly acts on its own..

Love the intensity, and there is a lot of truth in your message. Well done.

Well..the idea was brilliant. Really. And I love some of the imagery i this piece.

but why even bother posting it? You obviously don't care about being a writer. Real writers make an attempt to read through their work and edit it.

I think your laziness ruind this piece. This could have been great, but the whole not rereading your work thing just killed it.

alice

very very nice i like your style, look me up and chst with me on myspace if you want, thanks for the review by the way, this as a really good poem, very nice vocab.-nicole hill, myspace user

I was just looking through your work and I can't believe I've never noticed this piece...lolz. The title really suits it

The Idears and images in this pice are so clever keep up the good work.

Wow I like that... it's definately different from a lot of other things people write about, (in a good way!) and I can understand what you're saying . Keep writing!

Hello, Braindead. Thank you very much for the review. Yes, I know, doesn't this person sound like a bore? )

Well, I'm sorry that I'm not reviewing a story of yours, but I was looking at the secondary genres, and I noted they were all horror. I don't do well with horror. XDSo, I'm reviewing this piece. I hope that you don't mind.

"Strands of sliver, dropping down, dancing across my vision."This sentence is... Wow.

"Or are they part of my celestial halogenations?"Although "big words" may be fun sometimes, you really must remember that if someone younger were to read your work, they probably would not enjoy looking up the words in the dictionary. You rated this K. It's always good to remember to use wording that the person with the smallest vocabulary could understand. Poetry can still be elegant when it's like that.

"But it could be a string of nonsense that travels across my skull in strange times."I don't really think that the word "strange" fits in here. I don't know. It just doesn't seem /right/.

"Or not.":)

:)

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Taddy likes.

"Maybe I’m not even alive, maybe I’m dead, reliving a twisted dream-life."I think that it might sound a bit better if you wrote "dream /of/ life", and not "dream-life". I don't know. Just trying to help.

"The ignorance was supposed to save me (it didn’t)."Don't you think that it might sound better like this:

"This ignorance was supposed to save me.

It didn't."No, yes, maybe? I just don't like the fact that this is like an after thought. This is the ending of the poem. It should be strong.

Overall, nice poem.

Tad

thoughtfully kool. really

Amazing piece of work!

as soon as i read the last line, i had two thoughts: "ignorance is bliss" and irony- because ignorance is supposedly "bliss", and yet, your last line says "The ignorance was supposed to save me (it didn't)." that was a great poem. nice work.

... cool.