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| Weltschmerz 2006-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuse...I almost fell asleep, not in a good way either. It's a wonderful, romantic idea, but I really thought you could have put more substance into the poem. Maybe more development to the idea to keep it from sounding so cliché and elementary. |
| face2face 2006-06-03 ch 1,  | abusei really liked the repetitions, both in the individual lines, and in the repeating words at the end. very nice. |