I really liked this poem. Lol, i enjoyed Alice in Wonderland and I like how weird it seems and yet it still rings the bell of truth. A really enjoyable read. The english used here was fairly well. I actually feel kind of intimidated. Ignore that. Anyway, really like this poem and like your sinopsis- it captured my attention at first read.

I enjoyed this a lot. It's nice to read something which has a deeper meaning but still sounds and feels good to read. I can understand why you like this one.

- gold against the soul

Very nice words, interesting ponderable concepts. I like the lines of the second stanza (though rabbits needs an apostraphe...rabbits' hole) and "Not yet tired of our word wars and gun battlesI can’t say for certain but I think we’re all going to die". The addition of the quote at the end is a very good effect--maybe put the A/N at the beginning so as not to ruin it before the reviewer clickies. How very introspective...

woah... ihonest to god don't know what to say about this except that it's deep and great considering you said that this is your first poem like this.

One thing though, in the second line of the third stanza, i think you mean 'world wars' not 'word wars'. ignore me if i'm wrong.

Happy Writing, Jazzie Kings

Oh, I really enjoyed this! I just posted an Alice in Wonderland poem myself. What a (happy) coincidence I should see this one only seconds later. The first stanza was my favorite by far – I love the rhetorical question you pose to the reader. I also liked the phrase “soaked in lunacy.” You mentioned in your author’s note that you don’t usually write things like this, but I really think you should. You’ve definitely got talent and I like this style! Keep writing!