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| SarahJaneDrkAngl05 2006-07-27 ch 1,  | abusewow that sounds like how i felt with my bf back in april. he talked about just wanting to be friends then the same night he brings another girl here and it broke me to pieces. ive never cried so much in my life. that was right b4 easter. we're still together but thats only bc i knew i still loved him and didnt want anyone else. i told him he would have a 2nd chance if he never talked to her again. great job! ~SarahJane |
| Smeagol Fasir Kenobi 2006-06-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good; lots of feeling. Good description, too. (goes to look up "obsidian" in the dictionary)I really liked the pattern, too -- eight lines, then one, eight lines, then one. Like it was starting to flow real well but then made you stop and think. Very nice, mellon nin--Smeagol Fasir Kenobi |
| Rono 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseDiana! It's Karen! (hEaRtS) I've found you! Aww, I didn't know you wrote poems, too. You're such an amazing writer. You put such visuals in my mind as I read this. I'm amazed by your talents, and I hope you continue to write furthermore. |
| inhye 2006-06-05 ch 1, anon. | abuse+Makes Ava's little "tear" motion+ So sad... |
| i call it laughable 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseugh, sad. i adore the parts in italics- a little originality is hard to capture in poetry but you did a fine job. i like how they're all questions, & you stuck with it. |
| burning in effigy 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseso sad but beautiful love the format and how she did keep one thing that reminded her of him... shows how much he meant to her great job |