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| she smolders 2008-03-17 ch 1,  | abuseYou've captured the essence of summer so perfectly and this poem makes me feel like I know her too. Take care. |
| Violet Marx 2006-11-25 ch 1, | abusegreat summer descriptions. especially 'chasing her cherry cola stained ego'. |
| Hell's first Icicle 2006-08-12 ch 1, | abuseand now i'm sad again. well, not really, but it's winter now, here. again, amazing imagery. You made me feel like it was summer again, just for minute, your writing was so vivid. i love it. i can't add this to favs because it's too full, so i'll add you to author favs instead. you're brilliant. |
| Narlee 2006-06-21 ch 1, | abuseLoved it! The descpritions: amazing. Just curious if it possibly has two meanings? Dun DuN DUNN! |
| la luna cara 2006-06-11 ch 1, | abusethe whole thing is very summer-y. i like the way she's personified, as this slightly egotistical girl who everyone wants to be friends with. nice job!! |
| Aquafied 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abusecan i taste california beaches in this or what. amazing imagery just something about this. so nostalgic yet not cheesy |
| coal and marigolds 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseThe last three lines don't really seem to fit very well with the rest of the poem, but there are some really good lines in here. "with golden hair that seems to touchthe edge of the sky" very pretty. |
| ode to a firefly 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseThere are so many brilliant lines in here...great job! =) ~Christine~ |
| breezy nostrils 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abusestrawberry (ice cream) dreamschasing her cherry cola stained ego & she’ll have you lick the sun dried asphaltwhere you fell to your kneesin pursuit - wow beautiful beautiful lines. summer's here! |
| Cydney Chantel 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was definantly amazing! That's just how I feel about summer-- being some pompous young girl with golden hair and a beautiful smile and a huge ego (but one well-deserved.) Most certainly one of my new favorites! -Cyd |
| boys kiss girls 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abusethis makes me smile. =) and yes. yes, she is here. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseWonderful attack on all the senses. Truly representative of the title. This screams of "summer", in a way that is difficult to describe. The detail and specific visuals work well in this. Excellent work. |