The most beautiful part of the sunset {- that's a gorgeous piece of description that. ^-^

metal folding chairs.

"It looked like any other grimy train station in any other filthy Sector Seven city. But it wasn't." : I think you should combine those two sentences. The stacato works beautifully for the next to, but the 'but it wasn't' didn't feel like it belonged to the the stacato to me.

Falkner? An interesting allusion.

"A knife glinted in the sickly, flickering fluorescent lights." : The two clauses seemed to come from nowhere.

Did Falkner calmly walk away or run? I think that's important for the reader to know.

Assasins. A very tough group of people to write, and a group of people characterized rather poorly. Can't say anything yet, but watch out not to fall into the common characterization wholes.

I gtg, but I'll review the rest later.

Wow, this is awesome. I love all the detail and action you put into it, its every exciting. i can't wait to read more.