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| Sarika 2006-11-03 ch 1,  | abuseHello... I've been reading through stories today, and I was kind of glad to come across one like yours. I like your writing style so far- it's clear and, as one reviewer already put it, to the point. Also, your dialogue doesn't come off as "fake" or trying to sound different or archaic. This beginning reminds me of the beginning of the movie King Arthur- when Lancelot is taken away from his family to be a knight. Good work.- Sarika |
| Angelic Brunette Hermione 2006-07-06 ch 4, | abuseYour characters are curiously intesting. I don't know whether to like or dislike Reis, but I admire Cadwgawn's spirit. ABH PS: I've updated my story yesterday. I'd be flattered if you critiqued it to see if I've improved. |
| Angelic Brunette Hermione 2006-06-24 ch 2, | abuseHey there! I hope you'll gonna update this story soon, it is quite good. But this review is in gratitude for reviewing my own story. I appreciate your kind criticism. Don't worry about the characters! As you'll find out as the story goes on, they'll mature and become "unstatic" (for lack of a better word. lol). I appreciate reviews as you always know! ABH |
| kristy23 2006-06-23 ch 3, | abuseOh, I really like this story and honestly did not expect to. Your writing is very clear and to-the-point, and I like how you allow the reader to form their own characertizations of your characters from their actions and their conversations. Good job. |
| Angelic Brunette Hermione 2006-06-19 ch 3, | abuseThat was really well done! I loved the imagery that your words create in my mind. I'll be keeping my eyes open for an update. A.B.H. PS: If it is not so much to ask, I have a new story that I've recently updated, and I was wondering if you would read and critique it. I'd be flattered if you gave your imput. |
| superheroesarereal 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseyay knights...haha good luck with that research there eh? |
| anon 2006-06-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseA nice start. :) (Although I'm going to have to be finicky and tell you that Cadwgawn is pronounced Cad-oo-gown [despite being the origin of Cadogan] and Fychan is Vuh-can [with a harsh CH, of course]. Sorry, I'm Welsh and can't help it.) But I do like your idea for this story though, quite original. |