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| Aquafied 2006-06-14 ch 1,  | abuseits like i can see myself in the italian resturant in new mexico talent you have |
| B. M. Reed 2006-06-12 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. i love, love, love it. |
| poetic abortion 2006-06-12 ch 1, | abuse"another world: one of falsehoods and impurities (so wrong, it's right)" - Seriously, I have a crush on you, that line completely stunned me and I was all "Oh GOD, LOVE! *Squeesquee**ingSQUEE*" and, yeah, completely foolish and In Love with it; the whole thing is awesome and I love your writing - write more? please? ~* Noelle |
| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X 2006-06-09 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was an intriging read. The words just seemed to flowed and it takes you from one place to another and then back again. Wonderful write. |
| a lonely september 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abusethis is really interesting. i love it the way you can take something simple & turn it into something ... really intrigueing. |
| dollface and her cancer 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abusethe odd, almost chiming rhyming scheme of this gives it a flavor all its own. i don't think i've ever seen a salad spun into poetry quite so eloquently, or with such perfect layering. |
| breezy nostrils 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseloved the diction in here. especially the way the words smoothly ran into each other. it was like an explosion. nice work. |
| astral boy 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing, as always. The format worked very well, made it... formal, somehow. I don't know where that came from, actually. And the last line was great. |
| bread and circuses 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseInteresting format. I like it - it's disjointed, but it works like a puzzle; the image slowly becoming clearer until it's complete. Nice work! |
| beti213 2006-06-06 ch 1, | abusethis is cool-a tumble into a world where everything is a reaction. we don't know why you're there, but you know that you are there because of something... and that's what makes the whole piece interesting: where is she? the only bit that I thought was a little awkward was "olive oil vinaigrette;" it seemed to disrupt the flow of the sentence. then again, maybe that was intentional. I like it-well done. |