its like i can see myself in the italian resturant in new mexico

talent you have

beautiful. i love, love, love it.

"another world: one of falsehoods and impurities (so wrong, it's right)" - Seriously, I have a crush on you, that line completely stunned me and I was all "Oh GOD, LOVE! *SqueesqueefuckingSQUEE*" and, yeah, completely foolish and In Love with it; the whole thing is awesome and I love your writing - write more? please?

~* Noelle

Wow, that was an intriging read. The words just seemed to flowed and it takes you from one place to another and then back again. Wonderful write.

this is really interesting. i love it the way you can take something simple & turn it into something ... really intrigueing.

the odd, almost chiming rhyming scheme of this gives it a flavor all its own. i don't think i've ever seen a salad spun into poetry quite so eloquently, or with such perfect layering.

loved the diction in here. especially the way the words smoothly ran into each other. it was like an explosion. nice work.

Intriguing, as always. The format worked very well, made it... formal, somehow. I don't know where that came from, actually. And the last line was great.

Interesting format. I like it - it's disjointed, but it works like a puzzle; the image slowly becoming clearer until it's complete. Nice work!

this is cool-a tumble into a world where everything is a reaction. we don't know why you're there, but you know that you are there because of something... and that's what makes the whole piece interesting: where is she? the only bit that I thought was a little awkward was "olive oil vinaigrette;" it seemed to disrupt the flow of the sentence. then again, maybe that was intentional. I like it-well done.