I love this, poems that manage to tell a story always catch my eye. The descriptive passages are lovely, and I like the italicized bits.

Aww, this was cute. Wow, I cana definitely see why wensheen recommended you to me! Excellent writing! I was never any good at poetry, so I especially commend anyone who can write it so well.

This is by far my favorite!! I love the way everything flows so nicely together. Especially the part where you say "pass the ones who are too cool for umbrellas, what's a bit of wet anyway?" Again, I like all the word choice and each word fits...perfectly! Sorry it took me so long to get to this review, again. I love this poem!

Wings of Fire

very sweet. fav stanza: "Then she spots it: sanctuary -in the form of a small, dark cafe.Turn left around the corner.There! Across the street,a small awning -but big enough for her."

i like the play with free verse. you're language has gotten much more experimental, and that's a good thing. keep on testing out the words mate.

suggestion though. keep all the dialogue in italics. "He grins. Some weather, eh?" To match it with the previous stanza.

otherwise, good work.

(and about how to sell. i swear some answers are coming. if you want though, we can talk.)

yay! i finally get to review!

i really like the way you used italics to convey the thoughts of the persona(s?). it's just such a nice ending. i could see this as being a really nice moment in a movie, too.

i really like the line "Wednesdays were never good"

still can't get over how perfectly you predicted the weather...scary...

the only question i have: i thought woah was spelled "whoa". but maybe i'm wrong...

this is so great! i just like the overall mood...it's hard to put into words. but post more!

darn! i wanted to be the first person to review this! fenishneg...cello lessons...(swallows resentment) but i still love your poem. a lot. i love walking in the rain, even though my parents think that means i have an eccentric death wish. but really, rain is more romantic than some make it out to be, but nearly as much as the movies portray it. you've described it perfectly. happy poeming!

honorata

Oh... me likey. -snatches- Under my favorites it goes!

The style's cool, sorta an out of body and mind view. I like that. It's great for poetry, but I've seen some stories with it written like that.

Great job, and keep writting!

Vira

Ooh just love your description of the hansome stranger, just sounds so sexy! Love the whole feel of this poem, kind of feels a bit like an advert in a way but in a good way. Really enjoyed this, was very different so well done x