I liked this poem... Despite the mess up FP made to it. It looks like you did it on purpose and that is awesome.

i really liked this poem. it was very emo and i love reading works of literature like this. it was really good! i feel that you are a talented writer and that you should keep writing. good job and welcome to my favorites!

Mr. Magic

I know what it meant to me reading it, but I just wonder what you were thinking about. That happens a lot with my poetry, that someone else sees it differently than I intended and mine isn't nearly so vague and metaphorical as yours.

Again, great job with the formatting. I especially like the way the spaced out words seem to drag and stick. It's like a slow machine churning to life but not picking up any speed, and at the same time it's like sticking your hand in something thick and gooey and pulling it away and seeing it stretch between your hand and whatever it was stuck on.

The formatting has been a very powerful tool in your writing and you use it very well. You also have had an excellent effect with your figurative language, strong metaphors and rich description. Your poetry is very dark and deep and somehow thick.

I love it. Keep it up!

~Krys

It’s a nice image to live by,If you can find it' -- great line. I like the formatting, how everything is spaced so it's kind of like a spiderweb of stanzas. tres cool. ~*

Your formatting is very good. It's nice to see that at least one person in the world knows when and how to use bold and italics. =)

By the way, I don't know if you know this, but when you're editing your poems before you post them, you can fix it so everything isn't double spaced. All you have to do is backspace so the lines run together, then hit shift and enter at the same time. It took me forever to figure that out!

♫ Christine ♫

You know you were right. It looked much cooler before FP messed up the format. But that dosent take away from the poem itself though. Once again, you never fail to entertain me with your poems. There is a strenght in your writing that cannot be duplicated I think.

Write more! Do it! NOW!

this was great! it was so extremely dark and hauntingly gory, but that's a part of its major appeal. i like the way you ended it... and it doesnt matter that the format got screwed up, cos the poem's just simply great.

i like the format. it gives this piece a sort of obscurity that wouldn't be found is just a regular formatting. nice job.