Reviews for A Dustbin of the Soul

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Averybarbarian 2008-07-05 ch 5,	abuseWow! This is really good. Great discription! And very differnt from all other poems I have read. Most don't deal with going to bed. I really liked the two lines Before my eyes. "Tumbling down a sloping descant, into…/Blackness rising in a muzzy tangle. A jarring note…" Awesomeness!! Great job and well done!
Averybarbarian 2008-07-05 ch 4,	abuseBeautifuly Written!! I really liked the lines "There is nothing to keep me here/But the sad flicker of a smile" You can feel the loniness and the feeling of not belonging. You used the beach as a simially as well as told a story. Great job!
Averybarbarian 2008-06-29 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. You continued using one thing to describe the issue at hand instead of 50 different things…. I like it. Unfortunately there are many people who lack the ability to communicate the issues they feel at hand… your poem is an all to common occurrence. Anywhoo… Good detail and well done
cosaco 2006-11-13 ch 1, anon.	abusehi! again! i like this one. i had to think about it to try and make sense of it, instead of just skimming through. good job! anyways, i also wanted to point out something in the reviews of my poems. in a semi-recent one, you said "i didn't know you had a fictionpress account", but if you look at reviews prior to that, half of them are from you. therefore, you are a silly, silly boy. just to tell ya. i also have a photo of you in an apron. muahahahaha. a silly, silly, silly-looking boy. yesh.
NinjaStoryteller 2006-11-03 ch 2,	abuseI like the slightly cynical tone. "A shivering orphan draped in singing jewels" - very cool, very powerful. Makes me like this piece very much.
NinjaStoryteller 2006-11-03 ch 4,	abuseLonliness is a lot of places like this. Just about perfect picture of this lonliness. I especially liked the surf singing "never, never"
J. A. Murray 2006-11-02 ch 5,	abuseThat's exactly how I feel most days. Like someone filled your bones with lead, yeah? Very nice. Also, you spelled the name of the previous poem wrong. It's l-o-n-E-l-i-n-e-s-s. It was bugging me.
J. A. Murray 2006-11-02 ch 4,	abuseVery grey and melancholy. A good rainy-day poem.
J. A. Murray 2006-11-02 ch 3,	abuseOne word: WONDERFUL. I love it. And that's real love, not just
J. A. Murray 2006-11-02 ch 2,	abuseYou should write longer poems so I don't run into the FictionPress "review throttle". It's a thing that says you have to wait 30 seconds in-between submitting reviews. And, apparently, I can read, understand, and appreciate your poems in under 30 seconds. So, yeah. I like this one, too. Especially the "At attention’s shivering orphan,/Draped in singing jewels?" part. It gave me a really good image in my head.
J. A. Murray 2006-11-02 ch 1,	abuseYo. Review time. I really like this. Very nice and accurate.
Gathering Crows 2006-10-29 ch 5,	abuseSo much love, even for those in a dustbin, you can still find gems. I especially like the last bit of "Ode to a Plunger" and the imagery you call up in lonliness. You have power in your words, never let it wane.
Guardrail 2006-10-10 ch 1,	abuseVery wonderfully emotional. The metaphors are lovely too, and there are some great lines in this poem. I really liked, "Using voice to shade in not-voice, And discussing white in terms of black." Cleverly written. I enjoyed this, definatley write more. Also, thank you so much for your very kind review. It makes me so happy to know that there are people who not only read poems, but actually READ them and try to understand. So thank you so much for doing that with one of mine. :)
phantom-jedi 2006-10-08 ch 3,	abuseAmusing, yet serious. The last two lines capture your point very well. Good job! phantom_jedi
CoSaCo 2006-10-03 ch 2,	abuseHi!I like this. It's good.I'd read/review s'more, but I'm tired. And need to go sleep. Yeah. G'night.(Also, I put up an explanation for the american-kid's-p.o.v. poem, if you wondered where it came from.)

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