Hello, RM winner! -waves-

Usually, I don't like infodumps like this, because they tend to be unexciting and turn me off from the story. However, I did like this one, because it got me more interested in this idea than I would've been otherwise. And having read all of this, I'm thinking it would've been hard to incorporate all of this into the story as it happens, anyway.

I also liked the second-to-last paragraph, because the short sentences added to the suspense, in my opinion.

hey, are you still writing this story? It's really good you should continue.

Way to set the scene! You give the reader a good understanding of the world where the story takes place before they read it--which is extremely helpful considering the scheme of Half Spirit. Great job! Please continue.

I like this story. The ideas you have about demons, souls, and sorcerers are a good twist on some old subjects. I hope you write more soon. I also think you could come up with a better summary. Mention something about demons and half-spirits, that sort of thing.

Short chappie no? But why did she ask for him to love her? And only her? I am mucho confused.

I almost feel sorry for that little boy in the first chapter that got killed and i feel sorry for lysander. this story is very intriging and you have to continue. Sometimes i forgot they were demons though.

Nice work. It could use some work on the setting--you know, to give it that realist I'm-there-about-to-die feeling. Otherwise, the character introductions weren't very confusing, nor was this part of the story. Anyhow, keep it up.

Intriguing prologue. Blunt, but it got the job done. Nice work.

This seems to be a pretty promising storyline, I'm intrigued to say the least. It's original, which is good, and I like the way it's written. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Wow. Spooky. I'm not usually into the whole supernatural thing, but this is quite good. The first chapter was a bit of a non-happening chapter, but I'm glad it was, because otherwise I would have been so confused. At first I was thinking it was ironical that demons had Biblical names, but then I realised they're Shakesperian right? Or they could be both, I'm not much for the history of names. Geinhotz though, that is one mean name. It sounds remotely German, although that doesn't mean German people are mean. I hope you don't know anyone called Geinhotz, andif you do, I hope they're nice.