It's been a while since I've read a new jorio, so I thought: let's check out some older works.

Glad I did. It's beautiful and has excellent imagery. Really well done!

very good, i like the perspective. it is one of those poem you can read a million times and still love it.

thanks for the review, now that i reread it, you are right changing and to with would sound better, thanks

This has a really neat tone to it. Great writing! Keep it up! :D