Reviews for Bain of My Existence: Ride Wild

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D-Mish 2008-05-10 ch 10,	abuseI loved this chapter, and I actually quite like Hank, just not his father - who's downright sleezy. So does Hank really like Elaina? Bit confused about that bit. I love how this is written and the manners of everyone in this story - how it seems to be set back in time. The first few chapters were confusing with the grandparents or what not but it makes sense now. Great job, please update soon! I'm keen to read more.
the wind is crying 2008-05-03 ch 10,	abuseGlad to see you're back. Since I waited until I had read everything to review, I think I have forgotten some of what I had to say, be here it goes anyways: I was a bit confused at the start of the prologue, but that may be because I expected to know the characters and I didn't. It would still be good to know who is talking all of the time, instead of inferring from the context and who is being addressed. To a lesser extent, the same thing cropped up a couple other times. If I hadn't had an idea what was going on already, I may have missed a few things. I like how you started to capitalize the first few words of new paragraphs. In the early chapters, before you did that, the breaks were a bit confusing, mostly because of the FP formatting. I noticed that a few things seemed shorter than before. I'm not sure exactly what, and I'm not judging one way or the other because you know best where it is all leading, I'm just remarking. If I remember something else, I'll post that too. All in all, a strong return. It didn't feel quite like re-reading something I knew, but still had the same vibe you had working for you before. Good job.
Raaon Teisha 2008-04-30 ch 2,	abuseHeyya! This looks really good. I've gotten in through the first couple three paragraphs, and I really wanna finish reading this. When I read your summary, it really reminded me of me. I'm just itchin to finish reading this, but I've got a large bit of homework I gotta finish before I do so. As for what I've read so far, you already sound like a much better writer than I am. RT
Drake Van 2008-04-14 ch 6,	abuse...i honestly can't wait to read Sandy's reaction to her mother's volunteering efforts :D once again, a brilliantly written chapter all round. i also love Sandy's comments to Caldar (who is the biggest prick EVER, i might add) and can't wait for the next chapters! :D update soon! Drake Van p.s if Sandy ever becomes a "pretty wife" i'll look to the sky to try and find the flying pigs ;) cya!
wrambler 2008-04-12 ch 6,	abuseI love this!! in the first two chapters I was so confused and I was like, "where did matty and susan (now sandy)" go? but they're back now, and i really like this story. the family history in the first couple chapters definitely adds another dimension to the story. well done thus far.
KelseyBell910 2008-04-10 ch 6,	abuseReally good! Continue soon.
Drake Van 2008-03-30 ch 3,	abusewhat?! what?!?! get back on your bloody computer and write the next chapter!! in case you couldn't tell, i really, really like this story and have been following it since you wrote the first version :D i like that you've put some background info in the updated chaps and i empathise completely with Sandy's suffering when Ashley drops Red's reins to squawk and grab the saddle horn -shudders- some people just shouldn't ride. anyways, plz update asap and this is an awesome story! :D cya! Drake Van
lisagal 2008-03-22 ch 3,	abuselooking forward to the next chapter ! great job!
KelseyBell910 2008-03-22 ch 3,	abuseIt's really good. I hope you updat eoon. =]
MissxSoniaxMarie 2008-03-16 ch 1,	abuseOh gawshh it took me awhile to figure out this was redone lol but its still really good so keep it up! =]
KelseyBell910 2008-03-16 ch 2,	abuseThis is really good. Continue soon. =]
Alenor 2007-12-07 ch 25,	abuseum...ok, i love this story and the past chappies have been great...but is this chappie in the right place? we seem to have skipped quite a bit of time... ~ Alenor
phelps112 2007-09-10 ch 25,	abuseso who exactly is tom felton? and do susan and matt ever get married? how long till next june, story wise?
Not Dead Fred 2007-08-11 ch 25,	abuseEep! Tom Felton...Fangirl Stampede... -geeks out- -is dying- -loves this- -wants an update- I really like this story...and I totally geeked when you brought Tom Felton into it -sighs-...erm right...- IS NOT A FANGIRL-...Anyway I like that you moved things ahead, but I can't help but wonder what happened with/to Hank...He was an idiot, but there is always hope for people to redeem themselves! Also I adore you for the fact you called Ginny Weasley a Mary Sue! I've been spouting that from my soap box since 19 and every one just says she is a really cool, pretty character, and that I shouldn't hater her. I don't hate her...Just Mary Sues... ~NDF~
heartbrokenangel14 2007-08-07 ch 24,	abusewow!! love the story!! it just keeps getting better...hehhe.. the way you describe how the gossips run around the town throughout the chapters makes the whole thing realistic. I mean, with it beaing a high class society as they mention it, then yeah, obviously some peaople would care what others think of them.. anyway, that's not the only thing you did good..heheh.. the quotes from songs or poems at the beginning of the chapter is really helpful. it gives the reader a brief encounter with the message you are trying to get through to them in the chapter and it just gives the reader something to ponder upon. anyway, cant wait for the next chapter! keep up the great work:):)

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