Thanks a lot for the vocab at the end of the chapter. It helps a lot.

I really like it so far! I'll keep reading

Hi, when would you be updating again?
Your story is great!

very interesting... I'd love to see where this goes. ;)
Erisah

Roar! Must have more! You best update soon or else much anger will be visited upon you. :/

Very nice touch with the scar. Adds depth and makes the character more 3D-ish.

AH, that last note at the end cleared up my confusion about the bad sentences.
I kind of expected to be more speechless in front of a dragon than only surprised. Maybe a little more depth in that bit.

I kinda liked the part where Miri was exploring and was "caught". It makes it less a Point A to Point B story, good sidetrack.

Good chapter, Onward!

It seemed that not enough shock of finding her father after never having one plagued Miri. She seemed not as surprised as one might think. Altho, the very last paragraph helped ease this issue a good deal.

Other than that, I think it was a greatly developed chapter.
I gotta say, this story has a feel different from other stories...it seems so professionally awesome.

Again, the language enhances the experience. Your very good with coming up with nonsense >D
Whoo!

I suppose Miri should have been asking more of her questions allowed. Such as why the Clan was so nice to her and accepted her? Why she was being taken to the king (but I suppose that will be answered soon enough)?

Other than that, fairly solid chapter, I like it.
I'm not so sure of Keran, don't trust him. hes a traitor isnt he?? lol Forget my rants, they usually don't make sense.

Rah! This was cool. :)

It was unique and awesome how your developing a new language for the readers into the story, thats really *well, it just makes me yell: Rah!

You're seriously making this very professionally! The detail and development in the story is going perfectly! Don't tell Mayaj I said this but, your stories are pleasantly a bit more detailed than hers :D

Most people with a powerful item (like your language incorporation) would get distracted with it and not pay attention to the rest of the novel. You don't forget anything. You make everything top notch.

Right on and Write on!

Aww comeon! Dragons Teeth Mountains? :/ You stole that from Terry Brooks!

Lol its ok, I stole from him too. Remember the name Caerid Lock?
Yup, stole it. You should change the spelling, just in case they get iffy about copywright (I know theyve complained about worse). Like Dhragon's Teeth or something. Like I changed to Caerhid Locke.

Other than that, I have but one thing to say. ThIs Is aWeSoMe!@!@!@! (etc.)

I have no idea if you screwed up your grammar because I haven't been so sucked into a story since i dont know when! Even Misty would be hard pressed to hook readers like this! And thats what I think shes best at :P

I can't explain why its so hooking. Is it the setup?? The style?? The characters??!! I dont know! Its just good, and I want more!

Hmm... It's alright but it skips around quite a bit in this chapter and there's no real continuity. Otherwise it's alright.

I think I know who it is! -rubs hands gleefully- Sque!

I like the way you write his perspective. It's got bitterness and hatred just oozing outta it. =D

Aww, we can't say? Seems to me Kendal would love to see him...And a very interesting point brought up by the merchant...Will it continue to be addressed?

I really like your story. I was wondering how you come up with the languages. is it based off one or is it made up? FT

Ooh lovely! It was a chapter about fathers, all around, huh? Poor old guy with the eye, urgh... vivid descriptions... good work!