Wonderful.

this. well. where do i start? the whole is just...surreal. completely dripping with fantasy and etherealness. and yes, your language and imagery are stunning. some of the words you use to describe things, and the way you manage to portray even the simplest of objects or ideas so vividly- amazing.

This is amazing, full of vivid imagery and metaphor. *adds to favorites* Wow.

I liked this! My favourite lines were "and she is white/ in her cocktail dress, a fish-fly beneath the/ dome of summer's martini glass, cranberry/ bile smeared across the sun" and "'come, dreamer,'" and "they are both too innocent to vanish completely." Wonderful images. :)

the last two lines solidify the transcending quality of the rest of the piece.

The imagery is profound.

there's a reason why so many of the great writers have been drug users. (haha where do you think alice in wonderland came from?) this is one of those pieces that doesn't pretend to have a lesson, but manages to make everything intriguingly more complex. revelation and forgetting. I love it.

"Words painting the air before them in splashes of obsession."

I just cannot get this line out of my head.

Beautiful poem, great work.

this is dangerousy maybe.

It moves twistily and I have to add y's to my words to describe things right.

its very pretty, and vibrates softly with the strangest feeling. its very unique its like...quiet, romantic madness. i enjoyed how your last word made the first word in the next phrase, so the descriptions never came to ends. very nicely done. and very sad. :( but i like it. :) the title is awesome.

love, c.induced.

oh...wow... i pretty much love all the (three) lines in quotations... and 'cranberry/bile smeared across the sun' is just awesome... 'purple blossoms whispering up from/each place her white feet have kissed' wow...and hell, why am i going thru each line? i was going to list every line i liked until i realized it's practically every line... this whole poem is just great.(yes, i know i suck at reviewing).but this is going on my faves. hope that tells enough.

it feels eternal and it's really not. the descriptions are really breathtaking, especially the way you use color. "she picks lotuses while he murmurs "nothing is real in this slumber"": everything seems to revolve around those lines.

This is gorgeous. Your descriptions are beautiful. I love this.