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| a lonely september 2007-06-05 ch 1,  | abusei love the repetition of 'please cure me' it's wonderful. really hits home, this poem. 'drink up, thirsty, from the well of youth' 'the pain inspires you'. & i love the first few lines. wonderful. :) |
| ShadesofBlue69 2006-07-12 ch 1, | abuseI really like the line "street lights...me waiting for you" but thats about it. this doesn't make enough sense.the idea that pain inspires you doesn't fit w/ the one of "please cure me" or at least your not showing how it fits, your not really showing the reader the connection.I'm kinda lost on the emotion behind this...it doesn't quite flow/make sense. |
| jenifer ayrs 2006-06-13 ch 1, | abusenice language :) especially like the 'inside out with glee' part; imaginative :) |