Reviews for In The Moment - FictionPress.com

Adaliah Pariah 2007-06-22 ch 1,	abuseWow. The description is what drew me in. I really liked the first two stanzas. Maybe in the third stanza, you could pull together the rhyme. The "I'm"'s I feel, aren't necessary after the first line, neither is the first and on the second line, I however understand the one inbetween mom and dad. Then you have the final and on the last line. I hope that's understandable, I'm not the best to explain. Other than that I found it enjoyable.
SarahJaneDrkAngl05 2006-07-27 ch 1,	abusei love how you write! you put so much emotion in your words! its beautiful! ~SrahJane
xInSaNexBlOodyxPrInCeSs 2006-06-12 ch 1, anon.	abuse"Life's not worth living if there's no risk worth taking..." or something like that, anyway. Definitely, sister. ^_~ ~hye
Rono 2006-06-11 ch 1,	abusePerfection! I love this one!
rust phoenix 2006-06-11 ch 1,	abuseThis is excellent. You put a wide variety of emotions into this without going over the top. I especially liked the last paragraph.
Bloodsinger 2006-06-11 ch 1,	abuseI love how this about life itself and taking the little every day things at heart. This stanza: "I’m patting bro on the shoulderAnd hugging mom and dad tightI’m bugging my sister like crazyAnd poking my cousin all night" sounds a little bit off in terms of rhythm, but other than that I like it a lot.