Oh...he didn't go with her??

This is really cute. You're going to continue with it, right? I love how you can tell what he's feeling, and it really gives the reader a sense of familiarity with Zak.

On another note, I would really appreciate it if you would go out and read a couple of my stories: Andella's Quest and the Twisted Path. I could use some help and criticism.

Thanks, and I really enjoyed reading your story...please continue!!

--Brynn