i'm not sure i understood it, but it was capturing. i enjoyed it, cause it made me think.

nice alliteration - planted perennials.

i loved "in this concrete hell of a sunny dream" images that don't fit at all, but work so beautifully together. a wonderful juxapostition(sp) of things that don't seem to fit, but work here.

i was hard for me to understand (but many poems are), yet i still wanted to read it. that is a beautiful thing, my friend.

-lily.