wow. loved the sea imagery and the "calmness" that I could feel from it. The only problem I have with this is the formatting and the repetition. I can see why you'd repeat the stanzas but for me it didn't really work. but hey, that's just my opinion. :)

That's a beautiful story! You have a gift my friend! I like the rhyme scheme and the best line is

"She said, Sometimes the last moment won't feel like the last

and that's the danger of endings--
"

that is brilliant!

the rhyming and the imagery keeps this "I once had someone..." poem from being ordinary and making it beautiful

Since I have a song called Memento Mori, I had to read this poem first before I read your others and I must say that I am very impressed. I loved this poem and will definitely read more later. Thanks for reading Alpha and Omega. I really appreciate it.

Until Next Time . . . .Raymond

Hey! As fictionpress poems go - wicked.

I can't pretend it's excellent. It doesn't quite claw out of the hole of cliche you dug when you first picked the general theme. But then only the very great poets could. And it never did make me get too sympathetic to this rather personality-less woman. (Nor could I ever believe "the young ones" all sitting around listening to all of this - that convention lived only over a century ago, if it ever really did.) But I liked the lines: they were musical. If your theme was a gutsy risk, your rhyming and rhythm were the safety devices that kept the poem afloat. It was the sort of poem you like to read aloud and slightly singsong.

My favorite stanza was the fourth.

I guess one big weak spot (I hate to say it, I hate to sound overcritical) was the stanza that was repeated three times. You set a much higher bar for a stanza that you repeat. It was good enough for a stanza, but not for the sort-of-refrain it had to become.