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| P 2008-04-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseNicely written. I like it. :D |
| Twilight Starr 2007-12-05 ch 1,  | abuseNice, descriptive, and short story. Good work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| katieee 2006-07-07 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. |
| Null1 2006-06-18 ch 1, | abuseWhat a douche! I didn't really find any more insight into Cash's character other than she falls under the old adage that sex and logic occupy two distinct regions of the brain, neither of which can operate at the same time. Also because I was too busy being revolted by that bastard. Maybe you could have him go club a baby seal and make racially insenitive remarks next? Start a whole series about Michael, a credit to the y chromosome... Very good as usual, though I think I went from having a reader's crush to wanting to stab Stan after that atrocity of a text message :D |
| RedBerries 2006-06-17 ch 1, | abuseEw...seriously, what a perv. He was gonna give himself a hand job using her hand? Not nice. The gold wedding band - nice touch. Suddenly everything seems even worse. The whole little boy thing makes a lot of sense as well now - you don't mention how old he is, but I'm guessing he's too old :: shudders :: Just the thought of him is gross. It's a great on-shot/start of a story. |
| xtcompl3x 2006-06-16 ch 1, | abuseaw it was all nice and dandy until the last line. Great ending. Cause it made my heart plummet and go >< aw. I loved how you structured this story to let that last line make a statement. I felt so sad when Cash wanted him to just stare at her sleeping but instead he wanted sex. >< Poor Cash. Great mini story. Is this going to continue? I'd still prefer it if you continued with Luka & Shoe soon! =) Please update! I love your stories. Am i first review here? |