|Reviews for Forest of the World|
| Xanaphia 8/2/06 . chapter 1
wow you made the thin line between judgment day and the 6 day creation more noticable to me. NICE!
| Nobody-n-Particular 7/13/06 . chapter 1
Quite lovely, touching upon my endless love and appreciation of nature.
| bjw 6/17/06 . chapter 1
Oh I was moved by the poem. It started off splendidly! I love the lines:
"sun spills lifeblood on the land""Leaves unfurl softly gently sensually""Sweet melodies of notes/Forever unwritten/But forever known." The last one especially was really...stirring.
But I think it would be even better if you took away the lines, "And nor will mortals/Ever understand/What rebirth means to an endless world" and "But always holds the past/In its hidden heart."; they distract the reader unnecessarily.
Neverhteless, it's a poem well written, keep posting!:)
| Stardust'n'Wanderlust 6/15/06 . chapter 1
Good despcriptions. Keep writing!
| Ryan Schiff 6/13/06 . chapter 1
You repeat the same words over and over again. Repitition can work in some situations (endless, endless, endless) however repeating things like the color of stuff dosent really work. It has potential, however it falls short.
PS: Try to organize into stanzas. It isnt that hard to do from the document editor.