|Reviews for The Smallest Elephant|
| Vampgurl99 6/14/07 . chapter 1
Hey, it's me again. I just checked out your live journal and it says that you live in Boston. I live outside of Boston! I thought that was cool so I had to let you know...okay that's it. Bye!
| Vampgurl99 6/14/07 . chapter 25
Wow, this is fantastic! I'm not usually into morbid endings like yours but it completely fits. I understand why the "elephant" had to die, but it makes me sad. To know that Keegan had to resort to suicide, that seems like such a huge decision. I think it would have made more sense if he had lived a couple more days after his breakup with Skeezie and falling out with Nehemiah, to show how badly he's doing and everything. It just seemed kind of sudden for him to go into his room and write the note and such, but I don't hate the ending, just saying that it seemed a little impractical the way you had him killing himself immediately after everything.
I wish you had explored Nehemiah and Keegan's relationship or non-relationship, however you want to describe it because it seems so unlikely for Keegan to just instantaneously like Nehemiah. I guess the harder you fall for someone the harder it is when they don't like you back.
What was Daniel going to say to Nehemiah when Keegan bumped into him? Just that he should stop drinking?
I like how you had a sort of another background story with the elephant and peacock, quite interesting indeed. Did you first come up with the elephant tale or Keegan's story? I wish you would do some kind of a one year after epilogue or something like that. To see how Keegan impacted everyone with his death. Cause I'm sure Skeezie would blame himself and maybe Nehemiah too...I don't know, but just a thought.
I'm really happy with how your story turned out even though you wrote a really sad ending, it seemed to fit mostly. I just wish you had a expanded on some small things a little more. Alright, keep on writing!
| TheyLied 6/13/07 . chapter 25
*is in shock* ...Oh... wow... poor Keegan. T.T. I hope Skeezie and Nehemiah feel really bad! I mean, I know they were hurt and all to but... Keegan was such a cutie! . My suggestion that you don't have to listen to (and, knowing myself, I understand if you don't) is to write a little one shot/ epilogue thingy to that we can see the two boys reactions. Or the funeral. Or something. Or hey, bring Keegan back from the dead. Zombies really aren't that bad, just the hunger for brain really. And I know two boys (Nehemiah and Skeezie) that would be willing to donate! (ok, not willing, but force and knives still work, right?) Meh, I'm now going to bury myself in brownies and cry. *sniff* Poor Keegan...
| just give me november 6/13/07 . chapter 25
this made my tummy sad. i think i might throw up.
good ending, though... i mean, honestly, of course, i wouldn't want that to happen, but it makes sense. i feel so bad for skeezie.
| dolly-dear 6/13/07 . chapter 25
Awwe.. I hate Nehemiah now. I hope he like, feels horrible now. And Skeezie, I just want to hug him. Really. He deserves it. Poor, poor, Keegan. Poor, stupid Keegan.. I hope someone finally cares about him. Sad..
| diebyownhands 6/13/07 . chapter 25
So much for hope. Oh I have tears in my eyes and a little five yearl old asking why I look so sad.
I don't hate you it was a very good ending. A proper ending I guess. Once you get over the sadness and the ... gosh lost hope, because I really hoped things would get better for him you figure it was a good ending, for the story.
I wonder how everyone else will take this. Skeezy and Nehemia how will they take this? so sad and I'm rambling and this probably makes no sense.
This was/is a beautiful story and not all stories can have happy endings.
| diebyownhands 6/13/07 . chapter 24
I really like that song. I hope I won't think of this very sad chp when I hear it now.
I don't even want to read the next chp. I mean is this a tragedy? or will someone be there to stop him?
| diebyownhands 6/13/07 . chapter 23
oh my you are giving us all three last chps like that all at once! Should I be extremly happy or sad to see an end? oi I have to admit I'm surprised.
Omg poor skeezie. I feel so bad for him, reading this story I had never felt to bad for him until now. You really did a good job at portraying(sp)his heart break.
damn and I didn't think this could get sadder. Now if HAART is what I think it is... then shit, you leave me speechless.
| ddz008 6/13/07 . chapter 25
Great story! It was such a sad ending, I wasn't expecting it, but I think it fits, it doesn't give feeling of hope and a better future at the end but it really works for the story. Poor Skeezie, Poor Keagan... I don't know what I feel about Nehemiah, but this is such a heartbreaking ending. Sadly, life is just like that many times. I hope you post something about Nehemiah's or Skeezies reactions towards his suicide. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful story with us! :)
| InsonsInsontis 6/13/07 . chapter 25
Oh wow. Definitely NOT how I expected it to end and while I'm totally a sucker for happy endings I'm glad you ended it the way you wanted, it fit the story really well.
Is it kinda lame that it made me cry? I guess I got really attached to the characters over time and it's just so sad that it had to come to that. But such is life right? It doesn't always have a happy ending.
I'm very sad that the story's over, but at the same time I'm glad you finished it. I'm definitely gonna miss it and all the characters, but I hope to read more from you soon.
That being said, I hope you plan to write more. You're a great writer and if you do plan on writing more I will definitely read it.
Oh and P.S. all flaming bags of poo will be withheld so long as you plan on updating Can't you see him too? because I am so freaken mega excited for it.
OMG LAST REVIEW FOR THIS STORY EVER! I shall miss creeping you out with my crazy insane excitedness (until your next story of course!) Ta-ta till then! :D
| J.D. California 6/13/07 . chapter 23
amazing piece of fiction
| J.D. California 6/13/07 . chapter 24
very beautifully written
| J.D. California 6/13/07 . chapter 25
wow. you put so much emotion into words. very good writing
| Amindaya 6/13/07 . chapter 25
Well, gawsh, I thought it was a perfect ending. Thanks for the wonderful read.
| Ishtani 6/13/07 . chapter 25
Oh, that's so sad. Wonderfully written, absolutly excellent work...just so sad.I think I might actually cry. Thank you for the story.