Love the metaphors. Loved it.

Well, I particularly like this. Its rather good. Bravo.

And yes I am complementing you. Despite everything I still think this is wonderful.

Its a nice poem. quite... different. anyway calling me a twat was quite harsh. the GLSNWO was just a joke, and you have realy offended me! lastly please unblock me on msn, if you dont want to dont. i just dont know what i have done

keep writing

Godly Luke Staden

another b-e-a-u-t-y honey, i like the bracketing in the repeat, the punchline in a footnote. works nicely. iz x

Ooh fantastic little line 'I'll take extra cream to fill my little holes in time'. That is just so delicious. Like the way you choose to emphasise certain bits of your poem. The whole thing works really well and the idea of the starbucks employee is very poignant. I think for a lot of people Starbucks kind of just stands for commercialism and the immagery you put to this idea in the poem really brings out that message. Well done x

This is brilliant D

As usual, I have no idea what it's all about, but I still love it, as a collection of words. This is a brilliant song. (brilliant brilliant blah blah, I need a thesauras)

Gotta go, great work x

This could have been written a little clearer, I think. Unless I just read through it too fast.

oh i love it so much! your best i think. hmm...anywho, i love "i'll take extra cream to fill my little holes in time" 'mazingx

Lovely work. Really inventive and creative. I love the last lines; gorgeous and open.

"Why is it only the shade of you that shows through bandages?"I love it. You made it work and its lovely and depressing and lonely.