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Ngoc1231 2008-07-09 ch 20,	abuseHahah cute! Well I don't know if you really want me to do the poll thing, but I'm bored and I don't want to go and start my summer hw so I'll do it haha. 1)Fav Scene: After the wedding and Angie is explaining to her friends how she got a concussion from the bouquet. Fav Chapter:The first. It was a cute opening and the title. Man the title explains my life haha. If life doesn't hate me, fate does haha. =P 2) Least Fav scene: When Angie wasn't able to deny going to the pool with Kyle. I just feel really bad for her. And Kyle was really starting to scare me haha. Least Fav Chap: The 5th. The who like incident with running into Alex made me a bit sad haha. I was totally going to say something else, but it was from your other story Recover haha. 3) Weakest aspect: um.. yeah I'm not much of a critic haha. I actually don't know. =P sorry. 4) Improve: I'm no good at writing so yeah.. I am no help here either. Sorry =P 5) The end: I liked it. If you left it as something else, I would have just assumed that she had already told him that she loves him. I wish I could say that I know how the words "I love you" actually effect a person. Considering I haven't ever been in that situation, but from what I've seen, even though it is implied that you love that person, and they know that you love them, it is so much better when they say it. Or that is what I got from all of the stories I've read. Sadly, I kinda fit the category in your other story Recover: "Anyone who hasn’t had a boyfriend by sixteen is doomed forever." Yeah. That is me in one sentence.. kinda. It is messed up and complicated haha. Recover is one that I sort of knew what she was talking about. Well this was a great story! ~~Ngoc1231~~
amaryllisfaye 2008-07-06 ch 20,	abuseso much fluff - love it!
emotionless-stares 2008-06-28 ch 1,	abuseI like Alex lol. She's really irked by him huh? I wonder what's going to happen next. She is going to see him anyway, no matter how much she doesn't want to. Oh, and I can't believe that she just picked up the match and stared at it lol. I wonder what Alex got in detention for..
xHopeLesSdReaMeRx 2008-06-28 ch 20,	abuseWOW! i love the story! especially the ending.. keep it up:)
Akemi Murase 2008-06-24 ch 20,	abuseFirst let me say that this is the 2nd story of yours I've read (the first being Smooth Move). Now let me say that I don't review much seeing as I don't have a lot to say. Last but not least, I love you. Your stories are AMAZING and I am going to read them all. Now for poll questions: 1. My favorite scene... I loved the beginning detention scene. Therefore, I love the first chapter. You're very good at starting off stories and can easily intrest a reader. (Well, at least me, I don't know about anyone else.) 2. My least favorite scene was the one where Kyle asked Angie out. First off, I do NOT like Kyle. I don't think I did from the start. For some reason, him seemed like a ten-year old in the first few chapters... but then again, I see millions of people as scarecrows and greasers. 3. Once again, the fact that Kyle seemed like a little kid when he was asking out Angie. I know you wanted him to seem innocent, but that's just how I saw it. (Can't think of a good vocab. word. MY MIND IS FAILING ME! :( ) 4. It seemed a bit jumpy in some areas. (I do the same thing only 10 times worse so I see what you're going through.) You might want to re-read your story and check where you think you can play it out a little more. 5. I like the ending. I love the future thing. Especially since you made it so things actually happened and they weren't just sitting around their happy rainbow field in La-La Land. You made it more realistic, Alex and Angie did fight every now and then, Kristen stopped hanging out with the others, etc, etc. Most of the time, people have the characters sit in La-La Land when the do the zoom to the future ending. Overall, I love your story, I love you for writing it, I love the Authors Notes (I didn't read them in Smooth Move but I AM going to go back read them), I love the random facts/question/jokes. When I get to a more current story, I will answer chapter questions. Can't wait! ~Akemi Murase :)
Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-05-17 ch 20,	abuseI really like this! Tis so cute! I hate confused feelings- which is most romances in the middle- but the happy endings make me smile :D
Mercury Fields 2008-05-17 ch 20,	abuseI think that my favourite scene was probably the last scene. The least favourite was when Kyle was trying to feel Angie up it was just so rapist style. Dont worry though its not the way you have written it. The weakest aspect was that you kept missing little things in her life that mad Angie who she is. I believe that you just need to work on your filling in of details and your story will be perfecter. Oh and the ending was great kissing in the rain , wonderful! Mercury
lovingstar 2008-05-02 ch 9,	abusegood
Artemis of the Golden Apple 2008-04-28 ch 20,	abuseWell I for one LOVE happy endings. To answer your questions, because this story is worth it... 1. I really liked when Angie kneed Kyle in the balls to get him off her, then ran to Alex's house as fast as possible and kissed him. That was the coolest thing she could EVER do. 2. I hated when Pat came over with her dad's clients and told her about Alex "cheating," and said specifically that Carrie had told him this, and Angie was suspicious. Seriously, was she so clueless not to see that it was HER?! (Yes, I yelled at my computer screen when this happened. innocent Doesn't everybody?) 3. The weakest aspect was...um...well, personally, I thought it took f**king FOREVER for Alex and Angie to get together, but I'm an impatient person. It was better that way, and more believable. Like I said, I'm just bad with waiting. 4. Honestly, I don't see anything you could do to improve. Your writing flows easily, and it makes me keep reading constantly. I can't stop until it's over. Of course, everybody improves over time, but it's not something I can detect. 5. Like I said, I loved the ending. Very satisfying. I can't stand cynical people who see the characters go through all this, then deem the ending "too happy." Don't they deserve this in the end? Once again, thank you for a wonderful story. And now, to look at all your other stuff!
Artemis of the Golden Apple 2008-04-27 ch 7,	abusesnorts Oh, I know what was going on with McFadden's waist-area. Damn horny guys!
Artemis of the Golden Apple 2008-04-27 ch 5,	abuse"melts into even larger puddle of happiness, from which flowers sprout" I have to say, that is one awesome line. Oh, yeah, the story...it's really great, as far as I've read! I just had to comment there. continues
oh y'know.that girl 2008-04-26 ch 20,	abuseYay! She said it, she said it! She said she loved him! OK, that was my little dance of joy and no I am not in Kindergarten. Awesome story!
Emerald123 2008-04-01 ch 14,	abusei AGREE. UGH. shes SUCH a PATHETIC WIMP! AH!
Emerald123 2008-04-01 ch 5,	abusewow angie is really stupid. alex so likes her.
Emerald123 2008-03-31 ch 3,	abusei must continue reading! BAH!

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