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Lyra Waterflame 2007-02-17 ch 1,	abusePlease write more soon? Please? This is my number one favorite story on FP.N. Seriously. Please please please please please try to write more soon?
ladyariande 2006-09-24 ch 5,	abuseWow. I cannot express my pleasure adequately. Your story has good dragons (major plus), a sweet, nice hero (hooray!) and a gorgeous horse (lovely) and you actually comprehend spelling and grammar (amazing). This story is really interesting so far and I hope you continue. My only very very very constructive criticism would be to pick up the pace just a very little bit. I like the thought put into this so much, but it could go a little faster. However, you know what you're doing, I'm sure, so just keep doing it and I shall be content. Adieu.
clair-a-net 2006-09-03 ch 5,	abusethis is some good stuf you have here cant wait to read somemore
Rio's Desire 2006-09-01 ch 5,	abuseI can't wait to read more, I would like to think of horses being able to communicate telepathically, that is so awesome, I want to see what will happen next with Kedreeva, will she even take human form again? How old would she be in human years?
Souls-and-Turkey-Cafe 2006-08-24 ch 5,	abuseo, interesting. very nice. i like it!
Lyra Waterflame 2006-08-24 ch 5,	abuseYAY! You wrote more! Please write more soon! Kalstralev in particularly is way cool!
Rio's Desire 2006-07-23 ch 4,	abuseAw...I was sad to read about the state she had found her parents in. And I'm curious to find out what will happen next so update soon, I enjoyed reading this story!
Faerie07 2006-07-22 ch 4,	abusePoor Beauty. She doesn't quite understand what's going on, but neither does Kalstralev. Whatever shall they do??
Lyra Waterflame 2006-07-22 ch 4,	abuseAw... Poor Kal! He's so sweet! Please write more soon?
Lccorp2 2006-07-22 ch 4,	abuseHarr. T'alnoth of the Gold Flight: -Basic first aid: Wash a wound before dressing it, or you may inroduce yet more dirt into the wound and increase the risk of infection, which might damn well lead to limb loss. -Ah, yes. Generic "Herbs". The wonders of a Healer, just under magical healing. References for herbal medicines:http://w.consumerlabs.com/tnp.asp - the best of the best, Consumer Labs site. http://w.herbalgram.org/default.asp?c=common_herbs at American Botanical Council http://w.naturalmedicinesdatabase.com/ - this one I haven't used personally. -Remember the damn wounds. It doesn't happen as much with diseases, although it can, but fantasy authors have a way of putting their characters through wounds and then forgetting that they have them. Wolf bite on the arm? Doesn't matter! The character is swinging a sword as merrily the next day as if nothing ever happened. Sprained ankle with torn ligaments? It exists only to provide some worry for the other characters. She'll be using crutches by the second day, bouncing up and down on it by the fourth. (No. Rather not. I've been through that, and it took four days for me to start walking, even as slowly and painfully and with as much support as I did. The ankle is still weaker than the other one. It wouldn't be even that swift in a world with less advanced medical technology). If the character does extensive running, walking, and fighting, the wound should tear open. If it isn't tended and cleaned properly, the bandages changed every so often, then the character could sustain an infection, or gangrene, or loss of the limb. It's the rarest of fantasies where someone actually has to amputate a limb, but it should happen more often with as much as fantasy heroes get injured and then ignore the injuries.
Lccorp2 2006-07-22 ch 3,	abuseHarr. T'alnoth of the Gold Flight: -If the slaughterhouse was burnt so long ago that grass is growing over the ruins, other smells would have overcome those of the place long ago, especially if it'd been left in the open for wind and rain to cleanse the place. Why would insects still be there? There's nothing left for them to feed on, all should have rotted away, if not burnt. Beware of contradicting details, please. -Stop it with the angst, please. If you're trying to endear Keedreeva to your readers by showing how whiningly pitiful she is at the death of her parents, you're doing just the opposite. The continous **, whining and striking out at people who are trying to help her makes her deserve a good slap upside the head, or failing that, the people who are helping her throw their hands up in the air and leaving. Making Kalstralev so continously apologetic and forgiving for all she's done to him is rather stupid, too. It gives me the impression he's nothing but a plot device for now, and not a sentient, alive character. hm.
yv 2006-07-22 ch 4, anon.	abusei like your story!what i especially like is that the characters develop slowly and events don't unfold at a ridiculously fast speed. i can't wait to learn more about kal's past. please update soon!
Lyra Waterflame 2006-07-20 ch 3,	abuseAw... so sad! Poor Kal! Poor Kedreeva! Please write more? Please? Soon? What happens next?
jimster 2006-07-18 ch 3, anon.	abuseI don't usually read stories that haven't really been developed yet. Or, erm, are not finished (I really am not that patient, a vice I know). Your story caught my eye though and I'm glad it did. It seems uber cool so far and I hope you keep it up!
Faerie07 2006-07-18 ch 3,	abuseInteresting. I can't wait to read more.

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