This is very good, gramatically, stylistcally, and especially with the plot. I'm interested to see where this is going and why her father is so mad, what the pendant posesses, and why someone would give an eight-year-old something so obviously important. Great job, and I hope to read more of this.

Thanks for your review. Most of the gramatical issues were before I had a class with the goddess of english and before the MLA handbook, but it's under a massive edit as of right now.

-Xero

An interesting start and I like the way you describe Caleb here and the sentence you used to end the chapter. There were a few grammatical errors and such, but it was overall good.

love the use of Caleb as a girl's name. this sounds really good... but i feel so bad for Caleb! i hope she gets the pendant back... =(

What's up?

OOH!! Whoa!! This is so cool!! I love it! I wonder what the pendant actually is for because it's obviously not just a trinket...hum...ooh! Again, you have to update this story super fast!

Wow, this is a great beginning! You really know how to hook your readers, don't you? I'm actually pretty anxious to see what happens next. Caleb is a rather unusual name for a girl, isn't it? I have a male friend named Caleb...but I like it on a girl. That's pretty cool.

Please update soon!

-Mephistophelian