So swet!

This was such a wonderful and lovely story! I must say, I was absolutely captured with this tale. Your main characters were beautiful and I pictured them clearly in my mind!
Thank you for writing this great story.
I thoroughly enjoyed it!
-Ayla

Love, gosh...It was beautiful...i juss loved it...your a really good writer...you've got me hooked...lol...well now i'm gonna go read more...

loves yahs Der Bear...haha
Krysti

So far so good...I don't like reading but you've got me hooked...will read later but i've got to go for now...
talk to ye later...on myspace maybe...and i love it...
xx

Argh pretty! I liked muchly!
Please keep writing, I love your style and I always check to see whether you've updated.

Janna
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sme thing i sed last time - dats reli sweet

aww dats so sweet

I like the way you ended this chapter. It was cute and romantic at the same time. You also made some conflict with Mary, though I didn't even guess they were together until now. I thought she was like his boss and just let him stay there or something. Good chapter.

Ah, I love this chapter to. The detail and thoughts you wrote in this chapter, especially around the time of their kiss, was really good. It should be nominated for best kiss scene or something like that. Usually people, including me, just have them kiss and then they think about it but you focused on it a lot more and I like it.

I love this chapter. It makes me smile and want to giggle. They're cute together and Kye freaks out because he doesn't have a shirt on. It seems to have improved from the last few chapters also. It flows good.

This is good so far, nice plot line but you are kind of going a little fast. If you want to move that fast you should probably put more emotion and thought from the characters about why they're going so fast so that it seems more realistic. It's good though and only the beginning so the next chapters might clear up the suddeness.

I think it's good so far. I like how Kiyoshi is kind of clueless on how to act and doesn't understand the slang. It gives your story uniqueness.

A good start. You introduce the character and his personality but you also have conflict to keep it interesting.

Hello hello!! I'm checking out your stories as promised ^^ (unfortunately, I only have two- only one is shounenai/yaoi... -_-;; *cracks whip* must get a move on..). Okies- I do have some constructive criticism and comments- good or bad first? Bad okay..

*takes breath* Please don't take this the wrong way but I just thought it a bit odd that Kye seemed really oblivious to somethings in modern society. Or how people worded things. For example when the woman says that was her husband's seat, did he literally think there was a tiny man sitting on the chair? Or the pidgeons- I'm sure there are pidgeons in Japan too, those bloody winged-rats are everywhere >_>;; *has a phobia of birds flying overhead... yes, I got pooped on .__.;* I can understand if he was raised in the countryside cuz Japan is probably the most techincally advanced as well as the most backwards country at the same time. But still, I can see your point of trying to make him guillible and naive.

Okay good stuff now!! I do adore Kye's character! Mateus not as much, although I can just picture his gorgeous eyes and seductive voice (yum-oh), I just like Kye's naivete >.>. Seems very genuine... I think the highlight was in ch 8- makeout session baby~. And BAM Marie gets a glimspe of Jerry Springer Live in her own home xD. I dunno, I like some tension, I'm sadistic like that lol. The end was just adorable- I can see why people wanted a sequel, you tend to leave topics really open. Methinks Matti is going to Japan with Kye *taps nose*. Oh yeah, I was lead astray too- someone mentioned that they thought Mateus might have been Kye's estranged bro- I had an inkling.. maybe. But that would have been incest, yuck d:. I'll read your sequel and other works next ^^.

Aww, what a cute story ^^ *hugs story*