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| aurora llyria 2006-06-18 ch 1,  | abuseThis is pretty cool! I really like the unusual formatting, like italics for "lean," that was great! And "open" all spaced apart, that so fits the word, it's pretty awesome! And I love the line "(oh, golden green of may)" (even better with your formatting) - well, I think the last three lines are my favorites of this poem. I also like the "summer sweaty/brown tresses in my face" - again, interesting formatting adds to the poem. |
| searchlight 2006-06-17 ch 1, | abuseOh, I can feel the sunshine! Great job with your description, it made me feel as though I were there. Also, thanks for the review. -Searchlight |