AMAZING! I love the flow it has but it also sticks to a sort of frame but having the 'Come,_with me' at the begining of each verse. I love the ending too, it really ends it with something to think about.

I love this poem, but to let you know, if you fall, I will pull you back out, because you are one of the best people I have met.

I might not actually fall with you, (it's kinda hard to do form my position) but I will go as far as I can to help!

Ok, all done, keep writing, it's great!

this poem kind of touched me, for reasons i don't understand. oh well. anyway i really liked your writing, there was quite some imagery and i felt emotion in it. nice work (: & oh, thanks a bunch for reviewing my story!

I love this poem: it rings so true and light until the end. But nonetheless, it's fitting for everything.

thank you so much for your review, and all teh criticism, I'll try to work on that as the story progresses, what you said about the reader not being very clear on what's happeningat some points. I appreciate it, and hope you keep reading. Now on to your poem. I like it and can relate... I'm currently imagining putting it to music and works very well. I love how you manage to make it very structured.

This is one of my favourites of yours but the only critisism i can give is i do think that the rhyme in the first stanza seemed forced. Also what do you mean treason? thats means betraying your country, - also only way you can get executed in England (my county)

anyways keep writing!

~Godly Luke Staden~