Good start.

This story has potential.

Have an amazing day. :)

Twilight Starr

Wow, you're like a master picture prompt writer. This was so developed and just... bittersweet. Great story, thanks for submitting this :)

Oh, thanks for the review on the DawnFire Trilogy History. I have the story that relates to it - check out Liminality.

aww...such a brilliant story with a sadish/tragicish ending...

Wow, what a sad story. I like the way you switched from the past to the present and let the story slowly unfold. Your characters were also very realistic.

I look forward to reading your other story as well. Thanks for the reviews of my stories. :)

That was good. You really pulled a lot out of that picture.

Oh, and thanks for the review. I fixed the typo.