I like it. However, I believe that there could be some minor language changes. Some of it could interupt the overall flow pattern of the piece. But I'm not perfect and it seems others like it like it is. I just wanted to offer that it could be a bit better here and there. Thank you for reviewing my poem Jaded. :P

This poem makes me very sad, for I feel like I am going through something similar right now. I loved it.

I really liked it. It was simple, direct, but full of emotion; thus the basis for good poetry. My opinion is a little biased, though, as I'm living your poem to a degree, making me more likely to connect with it. I just signed up and once the friggin 3 day wait is over I'm gonna' add crap of my own at last. That last comment was completely irrelevant, but I wanted to vent about the three day wait. It's so pointles. Anyways, good job!

i agreed it is sad, but its so sweet. i can totally relate. you definitely have to patient if your waiting for your true love. i loved it.

Aw...this was quite sad.But I loved it. XDGreat job!