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| VELVETxKISSES 2007-10-27 ch 1,  | abusewow, this is beautiful. i love it. |
| aerilist-creator 2006-09-19 ch 1, anon. | abusethe first two lines sound like the first two lines of that one goo goo dolls song that i love so much. better days. it goes: "you ask me what i want this year, and i try to make this kind and clear, just a chance that maybe we'll find better days" but whatever, i dont care. its a good poem, but i wonder why you put it in japanese, too...? i dont really care about that either, but still. and like you said you need luck, good luck, with that girl the poem is for. yeah, i read your profile. i wanted to thank you for reviewing my story which you read part of a long time ago, i dont even remember how long ago. the little white book. by sapna-shanti, although i mightve been mauree w renaee at that time, im not sure. because ive changed my name. i dont know why i called myself 'aerilist creator' here, im just in a weird mood. keep on writing --AC |
| Cailin O'Keefe 2006-08-11 ch 1, | abuseBen that was beautiful! ((BTW: It's Chara...^_^ Surprised, neh? I know.)) Jeez I didn't know you had such a way with words...or Japanese. You've gotta' help me learn. I insist. I am bad with sentence structure. Owari. |
| KingdomRain 2006-08-01 ch 1, | abusei loved the way that it was in japenese in one part... all in all i thought the poem was deep.. very good... |
| Briar's Thorn 2006-07-26 ch 1, | abusenice the flow was off there at the last few lines. but is this about sis. or what? oh well nicely done. Please review some of my stuff you havn't in forever.Love Thorn> |
| Travis C. Eckert 2006-06-28 ch 1, | abuseInteresting, you must have the translation for your native language or something. |
| poisonbunny 2006-06-21 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. It sounds almost like a song . . . like maybe the ending to an anime show or something. ^_^ My favorite line: I wonder if you'll ever let me see/what you hide so deep inside. There's so much secrecy. This person who is being spoken to sounds like a real closed book (they always are -_-') *sigh* The last line is so sad, like the narrator is getting sick of waiting. It's very bittersweet. But more bitter, than sweet. Is Japanese one of your spoken languages or did you look these up? Either way, it's a nice touch that makes it unique. So, yay! LoveANi |
| Black and White Dreams 2006-06-20 ch 1, | abuseThis is so sweet. I love the line "You smile, but you're a mystery" Beautiful job. |
| warrior of innocence 2006-06-18 ch 1, anon. | abusenice...i like it. How did you learn to do the Japanese? Its really cool. Any ways great poem. |
| Bunnie09 2006-06-17 ch 1, | abuseYaya! This is beautiful! Do u know Japanese, or did you look it up on a dictionary or something? I know a little bit! Great job! Please R&R some of my poetry! Thanks! Natacia |