i absolutely love your historical fiction! please write more of this story as I've recently started it after having finished reading 'Forsaken Identity' :) you're very concise with your history and your research of the time and era is pretty good! so refreshing, I'd love to see more!!

Your writing is really great but it would be better if you updated once in a while!:) this story is better than some published work i've read

is there any more to this story it is so good?

are you going to finish this? :( because its wonderful. the writing is beautiful, and your characters have a lot of depth. I hope you finish this...sometime soon. because I would really like to know what happens to Kenna...and William. You've left so many questions, that you must continue writing. So we know if Dawn is the morning from her dream, if William saves her, everything...please??

FINALLY! i almost gave up on you!
love this story! please update soon...

aw i would have liked to have read the emotions going through william! i mean i guess his POV would have been nice but hey! i'm just one persone!

love it...

Great, great, great story. But you changed William's appearance in the last chapter. Instead of the black hair and eyes he's been described to have for the first ten chapters, he has blonde hair, blue eyes and... the tips of his eyelashes are blonde.

oh PLEASE please update soon. you are too mean, to leave it off like that. i want to know what happens next lol! i love thsi story. i love your characters, kenna isn't some superassassinator/fighter.. she's human. and so is william, he has feelings too. again, please update soon! =)

how depressing...
so you have an inconsistency in your story. In chapter 2 you described William..."He had a strong jaw, and dark black eyes, black hair, cut short above his ears."
Yet in chapter 11 you claimed "William nodded, his blue eyes bright, his face ruddy from the hard morning ride." and "his tousled blonde hair gleaming in the light. She noticed the tips of his eyelashes were as blonde as his hair, and for some reason..."
Do you have BETA's who read this? They should def. pick up issues (like inconsistencies) because the author is too immeresed in the story to deal with those problems. Oh and coming from a Pre-Med perspective it takes a bone much longer than a few days to heal and you might want to note that it takes people more than just a few days to fall in love (problems like that just happen because of poor character development). Anyways if you need help just let me know. Update soon. Oh and is this supposed to mirror similar events in Troy (Brad Pitt and that hot priestess) because I totally tried to make a story like that once and it looked really similar to yours (except a lot more drawn out) which is funny (at least to me it is) and slightly ironic.

"Kenna exhales slowly" keep it in one tense...

cute and short, if you ever do a revision you need to work on developing the characters more...they need more substance.

haha what a hot chapter!

interesting chapter...the dream was a bit corny, and your use of foreshadowing when it came to "Dawn" was a little much (haha your readers aren't idiots) but I liked it :)

haha how awkward and random...lol I hope you'll explain it in later chapters

very nice chapter, the dialogue at parts is almost elementary and simplistic, and you tend to switch POV's on a whim that is not very suitable for the reader, haha just things you can think about.

oh good chapter...very dramatic, it tends to get overdramatic at some points but that's OK :)