You have great rhythm...and this poem is very detailed...and great...

I’d stop crying on you…I try. (and I try, but I’m…)Unable.Is it asking too much? this is one of my favorite lines...keep it up

a stunning, rhythmic piece! from the first line--and a bold line at that!-- the poem has a fluid, undulating quality with clever repetitions and storyline! huzzah for synesthesia!