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| Warg 2006-08-12 ch 1,   | This poem i am already partial to as u know too well. ^__^ Loved it, truly, as it progressed and grew.. ending definate though expansive. Great work. .. |
| x-the wretched 2006-06-18 ch 1, | Good work! =) I enjoyed this poem a lot. The bolding of 'forever' added a nice touch. |
| Femme de Dieu 2006-06-18 ch 1, | like the idea of "a word"-- as writer's, why wouldn't i? i happened to have picked out the stream of thought expressed in the short lines-- don't know if you did that on purpose:**a word, pasing, turn back, without fading, paper-and-pen words can be eraased, and reread on and on into forever.** (i would've probably used "or" reread instead of "and" reread...but that's just me...) otherwise, i did feel this poem. nice job! |
| burning in effigy 2006-06-18 ch 1, | like the phrases in parentheses "indelible ink that perseveres/without f a d i n g/(except into our blurry-flawed memories, like our human eyes that lose their sight with time)" beautiful :) |
| Amalia Jagd 2006-06-18 ch 1, | the long lines could be shorter and the short lines could be longer... tip. but it sounds like a good poem. |