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| Aeristella 2008-03-07 ch 10,  | abuseTrully Delicious. ;) I simply can't wait to read on! Great job! And keep it up! |
| SabrinaJ 2007-11-04 ch 2, | abuseGreat piece of writing. Your description is thorough and moving and very easy to read. What a nasty sister - i hope she meets a grissly end somewhere along the way... |
| Carmel March 2007-08-06 ch 10, | abuseThis is a truly wonderful story. Your descriptions are fantastic. They just let the reader see into this whole world you've created. I like the way you use dialogue; it's realistic and flows naturally. And the storyline is creative, keeps you interested throughout the entire read. Like I said, truly wonderful. Good job on this, and I can't wait for more :) ~carm~ |
| Exploding Gun Exploding Hea... 2007-06-14 ch 1, | abuseGREAT! I LURVE IT! |
| Sexy vampirechick 2007-04-05 ch 9, | abuseAww..I love your story.Hope you will continue it! |
| Arrow Windwhistler 2007-04-04 ch 1, | abuseLooks cool. I know someone who would be able to review this more thoroughly than I could, but gramatically and plot-wise, everything looks cool so far. =D Granted, it's not really my kind of story, but you make it seem intriguing to say the least. Keep it up. =D |
| fallen angel818 2007-01-09 ch 9, | abuse:( That sucks. Wow. that was definantly the wrong words. She is going to die and I say "that sucks" -.- ' Ignore my ramblings. ^_^ Update soon because this is a really great story! |
| kittymobile 2006-12-23 ch 8, | abusei love this story so far, its great! ^_^ please keep writing. |
| Sexy vampirechick 2006-12-13 ch 8, | abuseThough it was a bit short like you said,it was great as ever.I love it.Please update soon!I wonder what's gonna happen next |
| Brother Andyn 2006-12-07 ch 8, | abuseHey, well, I read the last chapter. Pretty cool. The description is good, I think this chapter's better than most. Brother Andyn |
| TheLadyKnightOfCamelot 2006-11-28 ch 8, | abuseI seriously love your writing style and how you switch from Derek's POV to Evelyn's POV and back again. I love vampires and think you've done a wicked awsome job at making them sound realistic. Two thumbs up(randomly)! And post more soon!! |
| SnowWolf101 2006-11-26 ch 8, | abuseEach chapter seems to be getting more interesting. Keep up the good writing! |
| fallen angel818 2006-11-22 ch 8, | abuseYay you updated!! great chapter!! *scold scold* bad derek! lol. Update soon because this storyis really really really good!! |
| Brother Andyn 2006-11-19 ch 7, | abuseHey So far so good. The only thing I have a prob with really is the first person perspective from two diff characters, as I've already mentioned. But yea, keep it up! Andy |
| Brother Andyn 2006-11-14 ch 4, | abuseHey Pretty good so far, I'm quite enjoying this. Three things: what's preppy (I'm from Australia so that might be why I don't know) Secondly, I think its a little confusing having first person perspective from two different characters. I realised pretty quickly, but at first I was thinking ...? Thirdly, I've got no problem with the style...you can have as many girls in it as you like, I won't be offended! Well, I'll keep on reading. |