I think this is the one you wanted cc on so I will try my best. The writing is good, flow was fine, and the whimsical bits kept it moving, but I think it would work a lot better as a story. favourite line: You said I smelled of wild honeysuckle and I laughedi don't think anyone could have done it better though. everytime i read it over again i catch new bits that i haven't seen before and it makes reading it all the more enjoyable. this review is getting a little wishy washy so i'll just end it here. bottom line: i loved it

m... at least i'll have danced at all...

brilliant job telling the story. brava.

Wow, you are right, this could've made an incredible story...it is so complex, so very long but not boring at all. I can never seem to write a constructive review, but this is sincerely beautiful. It is filled with so many emotions, with the gravity of her rule, the way she's torn apart by her emotions yet still stays strong...all the characters you create are so amazing...congratulations on this, it's a masterpiece! Love, Mia