Hey, I love the story so far! I finished reading the ones that come before this one and they were great. Anyway your ending on chapter five was verys suspenseful. I look forward to the next chapter.

-Shadow

This is interesting, and well written. There are some tidbits I particularly enjoy - He chewed on a nail, thoughfully - being one of them. Also the line about watermelon muscles. The end is a tad confusing, when you say they were outside, and didn't come in till later. It's too early to comment on characters and plot, although the current setup does interest me. I'll come back in a day or two to dig in a little deeper, and see what's up.