In respects to wording, this story is well-written, I can say that. The thing I didn't like is that it sides so easily with the male chauvinist argument, that Eve was the cause for the Fall of Man. It portrays Eve as the evil (or with the weak will that evil can so easily possess) and Adam as the good. I had expected something deeper... The way this story unfolded, I did not like. But well-written anyway.

-Kay

Very very very good! But fig leaves grow on fig trees...Other than that, absolutely superb! You've got a real talent for storytelling.

Wow. That...was...wow. Very powerful.