Short and sweet. It made me chuckle. Good job...

D Maranwe Telrunya

such simple innocent words - and yet such a dark theme. lovely contrast

i love it.

the tone is so fairy-tale like and innocent and child-ish and amazingly naive and - that ending rips you from your seat and leaves you thinking that the world has stopped spinning. itissotrue.

* Noelle

intresting thoughts, very. neat little poem aswell.

I like this one because it's very short and breif and doesn't give you anytime to get lost between the lines.

Interesting, and yet no where you mention hope. Keep writing, s.