Wow, that is an amazing poem with great imagery! I am a big fan of Jimmy Hendrix and Im glad he inspired you to write such a good poem.

It's cute. I actually could see what was happening as I read this, so your imagery was excellent.

Just watch your formatting when you're editing this. It doesn't look like part of it was done properly in the editing before you posted it.

Wow...I liked the first love poem I read by you, despite it's mushyness, but this was ten times better. Your description really brought the reader into the moment and made everything real and solid. Excellent job.

Keep writing!

~Krys

mike! writing happy poems again? for shame!

at least you write 'em well. this one was so peaceful...

Hendrix is a god and your poem was amazing/beautiful.