She doesn't seem like a punk to me. And I should know. Or if anything, she's really not hardcore. Well, the storyline's ok, but it gets a little boring. I think you should stop making the story sound so monotone and inject more humor into this piece.

hey hey my beta! i decided that since u've been so kind as 2 read my stories, id try some of urs! this story is so good and very creative! its hard 2 describe how i like it...i just do. o, and lol, the fights w/her conscious. classic, yet original in this story! gr8 job!

Two things. 1) peircings is spelled piercings, 2) I liked that a lot. Actually, I thought it was kinda cute. :)

loved it!! hahahaha, i wished there was more and i loved Caroline Rapunzel Demeter!! but i have to confess i stort of skimmed through the first few huge blocks of words because it was all too much at once. but this was ur first story right? going to check out the other now~~

There were a couple errors in typing, just stupid little things, but i think you are an amazing story teller and i loved this. the begining which was chock full of discriptions was a little dull but the middle and end was worth it. i especially love the in head comentary, thats so funny! keep it up i hope to read more soon!