Oh, I love this story! Very witty and clever! I'm a big fan of unconventional or improper fairy tales that poke fun at all the stereotypes. Great work.

I like it. Very creative. The prospect of a fantasy delivery boy is very interesting, and the entire story defies the typical fantasy/fairy tale cliche in a very "Shrek" like manner (I know, comparing literature to a film isn't that great of a compliment, but still. . .) This definetly has the makings of a series if you wanted to turn it into one. Overall, nice job.